帮我修改英语文章January 10,2008Dear Mom,I would like to talk about I

帮我修改英语文章
January 10,2008
Dear Mom,
I would like to talk about I want have a I Pod.I can use my I Pod to play the music,movie and game.Every time I'm go to the shop,I see the I Pod,I Pod's colors,shop,sound feel,is very good.And you can use I Pod,to listen you like's music too,and play you like's movie and play game.Every time I see my friend take I Pod,I'm so want have that I Pod.The I Pod can play all Earth's music,game,and movie,that was super.I can switch song,movie,and game for my friend.My I can send song.movie,and game to my computer.I can play song to my Chia's grandmother.I can send movie for my sister.I can play game for my friends together.The I Pod have about 2GB big.
First,if you buy a I Pod fro me,I will sleep 8:00pm,I will finish my homework fast and good,I wish dish any time you want I do.I will read 40 minute,I just see 1 hours T.V.Play 1 hours computer.I will didn't buy chip,coke or any food and drink.I will every day go outside play 1 hours.Mom please buy a I Pod for me.
Second,mom,if you buy a I Pod,equity a MP3,MP4,Video game,if these three plus,need about $500,but if you buy I Pod just need about $300.$200 left you can buy many things.MP3 play music,I Pod can play music too.MP4 play movie,I Pod can play movie too.Video game,I Pod have Video game too.Mom,my English are bad,I can use I Pod to learned the English.Mom you have card the shop give you % off.
Last,I will use my money to buy,you just need to pay about $180.Mom please buy a I Pod for me.
Mom please buy a I Pod for me,my classified many have I Pod.My dear Mom
Your Children,
ChuChen Pan
语句,单词,顺序,都要好,或发个英语文章修改软件 给qqee01 1年前他留下的回答 已收到1个回答

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该名网友总共回答了22个问题，此问答他的回答如下：采纳率：100%

!,movie不能和play一起用,应用see或去掉它.
2,my friend是第三人称单数,应用takes.
3,is very good前少了主语,应加上it
4,I'm so want have that I Pod改为I want to have that I Pod very much.
5,The I Pod can play all Earth's music改为I Pod can play the musics which are all around the world.6,I can switch song,movie,and game .改为I can switch songs,movies,and games .
语法错误太多了,又写了这么多字,我实在说不完了,请找个英语老师帮你辅导一下吧.(几乎全文没一句是对的)

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